Thursday, September 10th, 2009

PROOF READ MY ARTICLE?

Kampex asked:


My article is about how robots should take over the teaching role of teachers ( i know )

i don’t think i structured it verywell
sounds like its missing something

10 points if you help, thnx alot :D

Brains vs. Batteries

Problematic Teachers

When students get a bad mark, they usually blame the teacher. That blame may be rightly placed. Teachers are highly trained professionals, and it is their duty to grade and teach with expertise. Yet a government study suggests that nearly 15% of students drop out during high school, could it be that the teachers are at fault?

From school bored surveys and inspections, it is estimated that almost a sixth of the teachers that are currently teaching in Canada are incompetent. Is a very serious problem. Incompetent teachers will have a negative impact on the students, and can lead to serious problems in the future.

Automated Educators

One solution would be to replace teachers with highly advanced robots. A vision envisioned since the 1950’s is now within reach. Researchers have already designed powerful artificial agents that are capable of teaching, and it won’t be long before they are intergraded into classrooms.

With robots as the teachers, new, more effective methods of teaching could be introduced. Textbooks would become obsolete, as would most of the traditional school utensils. Students can be taught on a one–on–one basis from the comfort of their own homes, at their own pace of learning.

David Cavallo, the co-head of the Future of Learning Group at Massachusetts Institute of Technology said that, “Children in the future will be able to explore and learn about domains at far younger ages…”

not done conclusion

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2 Responses to “PROOF READ MY ARTICLE?”

banjuja58 Says:

A few corrections:
1) school board, not bored
2) It is a very serious problem
3) ” a vision envisioned” sounds funny
find another way to say that
4) integrated not intergraded
5) utensils usually means knives, forks, spoons
find a different word

alladrm Says:

I have no problem with a thesis that robots (or computers) could do a better job of teaching than humans but your premise that teachers may well be to blame for student failure is not a sound one. Those students who want to learn always do somehow. The responsibility for learning lies with the student, not the teacher. It’s not necessary to place blame in order to move on to an improved learning environment.

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