Proof read my cover page. what do you think of it?
Jess asked:
I was hired at Firstsource Advantage in February as a debt recovery agent. Since then I have enjoyed the environment and the professionalism of the company. I feel that I have the commitment and motivation to contribute to Firstsource Advantage.
I am scheduled to graduate from Hilbert College next month with a Bachelor of Business Administration. On my way to completing this degree I have completed many classes related to accounting such as Account I, Account II, Managerial Financing and Money and Banking. Next semester I will be taking three classes that will finish an Associates in Accounting to go with my in Bachelor of Business Administration degree.
I have completed a one month internship at FCI McKean Prison business office. During the time I understudied the accountant in the business office of the institution. I assisted her with her daily tasks such as payroll, data entry, book/record keeping, finance budgeting and more. Due to previous work experience and college courses I have proficient skills in Quickbooks, Word, Excel, Access, Windows and CUBS (Collections Software).
In addition to a results-driven approach, you can be assured that I would uphold the highest level of work detail and ethical standards. I am flexible and adaptable to both new situations and changing organizational needs. Proving my ability to adapt, with no collections experience I have exceeded my gate goal of $1,500 for the month of April and expected to finish over 300% of the goal.
September 18th, 2009 at 6:34 pm
I think it’s fine, and I assume you are applying for a particular internship or job that they already know about? But one thing I see missing is what are you asking them for? A job? An interview? Consideration? Maybe in the first sentence you could tell them what you want out of their time in reading the letter, or something.
If I’m going through a stack of 90 resumes and cover letters, it’s really helpful to me to know that the person can communicate clearly and is respectful of my time. I like employees that think that way, and I like putting people who think that way in front of customers.