Hmmm. What grade are you- if you don’t mind me asking? The vocabulary in this paper was good. But there’s a small problem with clarity & unity. Throughout the paper your statements and passages usually go with each other, but you sometimes jump from one thing to the next without it naturally flowing into the next thing.

Where is the thesis statement? I’m not sure if the last sentence of your introduction was a thesis statement or not because it was very lengthy and your passages didn’t always connect back to the thesis.

Here are a few nicks I found in the writing:
You wrote:
The effects of Presbyterianism can be expressed by important events and things throughout history and things that could have an impact on the future

My edit:
The effects of Presbyterianism can be expressed by important events, things throughout history, and things that in theory, could have an impact on the future.

ALSO: In an essay you should never use ‘as follows’. Talking about your writing isn’t very formal. Instead you should be confident in your statement and say: The definition of Presbyterian is: “Presbyterianism is the name given to one of the groups of ecclesiastical bodies that represent the features of Protestantism emphasized by Calvin.”

This is my personal proofing though, and if you don’t believe in what I wrote that’s okay. Maybe adds some different words than ‘thing’ because that’s repetitive throughout.

Overall I would give this as of now mmm, an 80-85 as a grade. I thought it was a very good paper, very informative just be more confident in your writing. GOOD LUCK! I’m sure you’ll get an awesome grade!

on quick reading, i’d change “Christianity” to “the Protestant Church” in the first paragraph, as i don’t see presby. to be a direct branch from Christianity (i would split this into Catholisism and Protestantism, then Protestanism into Presbyterianism etc.)

Also “Whales” is spelt “Wales”, and i think Northern Ireland (seperate country) has a larger congregation than Irelang (republic) which is predominantly Catholic

Well I think that this is very well written as far as a can see. I see no errors and if there are any they are small and unnoticeable, though I would separate you paragraphs better and indent them (Just in case you keep like it is typed I don’t really know if you are or not).

It’s great, I think I saw a few spelling mistakes but otherwise it’s great. Good discriptions and I think you should start of the conclusion on where it might be in the future and what your feelings are on it. IT’S GOOD!

This sounds like you copied and pasted it. IF you did not its really good . BUt at the beginning instead of saying in the 16th centruing say during