First you have to indent (or leave a space before starting a paragraph)
That’s one.
Also: two budgies; they also count…
and last: names and titles should be capitalized (Muslim, Scholar)

Rest is pretty good. hope you’ll achieve your goals.

okayy..urm this is how i think it should be:

I love spending time with my family. My family consists of two older brothers, one younger sister and two pet budgies. i enjoy hanging out with my friends. My favourite sports are martial arts and soccer. Islamic religion interests me. hopefully when i grow up i will become a muslim scholar, and can teach others about Islam. By the end of year 12, i would like to finish the IB program and become part of a sports team.

hope it helped.

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“I love playing with my two budgies; they also count as family.” (inserted punctuation, otherwise it’s a run-on sentence)
“hopefully when I grow up I will become a Muslim scholar” (capitalization)

Otherwise it looks fine.

Good punctuation and grammar.