Friday, September 25th, 2009

Proof read my 9 sentence Essay PLease. EASY 10 Points?

skillz708 asked:


Going to church, my family is enjoyed. Since the beginning of time people always had faith and believed in god or a godly figure. The first reason people must go to church is because it gives them faith. In my opinion having faith, is a life essential, everyone must believe in someone or something. The second reason is having hope, by having faith you have hope. Having hope will give you happiness, and the willingness to look ahead to the future. The third reason is you will learn and develop good morals. Because by having good religious morals, you will be respected and liked in life. Having faith and going to church is essential for life.

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6 Responses to “Proof read my 9 sentence Essay PLease. EASY 10 Points?”

homersimpson9000 Says:
September 27th, 2009 at 5:38 am

nice

carly rae x3 Says:
September 28th, 2009 at 5:23 pm

Going to church is something my family has enjoyed. Since the beginning of time people have always had faith and believed in God or another godly figure. The first reason most people go to church is because it gives them faith. In my opinion having faith, is a life essential, everyone must have someone or something to believe in. The second reason is having hope, by having faith you also have hope. Having hope will give you happiness and the willingness to look ahead to the future. The third reason is you will learn and develop good morals. By having good religious morals, you will be respected and liked in life. Having faith and going to church is an essential for life.

Baby C Says:
September 29th, 2009 at 1:15 am

My family enjoys going to church. Since the beginning people always had faith and believed in god or a godly figure. The first reason people should go to church is because it gives them faith. In my opinion having faith is a life essential and everyone must believe in someone or something. The second reason is having hope and by having faith you have hope. Having hope will give you happiness and the willingness to look ahead to the future. The third reason is you will learn and develop good morals. By having good religious morals you will be respected and liked in life. Having faith and to go to church is essential for life.

dear megz Says:
October 1st, 2009 at 10:57 pm

My family has always enjoyed going to church. Since the beginning of time people always have had faith or believed in god or a godly figure. The first reason many people attend church is it gives them faith. Another reason is having hope. By having faith you have hope. Having hope will give you happiness, and the willingness to look ahead to the future. Also you will learn and develop good morals. Because by having good religious morals, you will be respected and liked in life. Having faith and going to church is goodl for life. My opinion on having faith, is a life essential. At one point everyone must believe in someone or something.

QueenofYack Says:
October 4th, 2009 at 2:58 am

LOL I am an atheist so I would have to disagree.
But I will play nice and won’t nitpick you ideas and will nitpick your grammar instead.

“Going to church, my family is enjoyed”
You mean your family enjoys church or the church enjoys your family?
“Since the beginning of time people always had faith and believed in god or a godly figure.”
Should be “have had faith”
Remove “god or godly figure” and replace with something like “a higher being”
Don’t label your points as “the first reason”..”the second reason”…just lead into them. Try something like “Religious practice provides faith”
Take out “in my opinion” because when you write that it comes not a valid point but rather just your point..so it makes the argument weak.
(I don’t know what you can write here instead because I do not believe that everyone needs something to believe in)
The hope thing is ok if you take out “the second reason”
The third point (in my opinion is bullshit) but try re-wording it to something like “Religious practice helps people establish a moral foundation and a guide to moral behavior”

*Sociological and psychological research indicates that there is no co- relation between going to church and “developing morals”. But I could see something like the 10 commandments/ Jesus Sermon on the mount as being a foundation or morals.

KKM Says:
October 6th, 2009 at 1:25 pm

My family enjoys going to church because most people have always had faith in the existence of a deity or deific figure. There are several reasons people attend religious services, most commonly held in churches or synagogues, with the foremost reason being it strengthens their faith. In my opinion, faith is an integral part of life–everyone should believe in someone or something.
The second reason is hope. Hope is vital to personal happiness and a reason to set future life goals.
The third reason people should attend church is because it will help develop strong morals. The whole religious experience is steeped in morality, which leads to a respectable and respectful existence.
Therefore, it is essential that people have faith and attend church to live happy, prosperous lives.

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